- Eva alludes to bad moods and deep depressions and she thinks her mother's death is a cloud over her life, but it's never really in a strong scene. So...fix that.
- Up the stakes. Eva thinks she might be dead and/or possibly dying through most of the "present day" bits. So, you know, make that a bigger theme. It drives her. Eva is not a person who is comfortable with dying right now.
- Increase the number of scenes or chapters from the past? Not sure about this yet.
- Figure out a good narrative/ scene balance. Ugh.
Saturday, October 16, 2010
Crap to Fix in Draft 3
So far, by own re-reading: